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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
In recent years, there have been a number of problems that
people
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 in big
cities
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 have to cope with every day. My essay will discuss two major problems which are
pollution
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 and
information
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 overload, and
personally
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,personally
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 I think those
people
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 should be encouraged to move to regional areas. Increased levels of
pollution
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 have been a great reason for concern among residents of big
cities
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. Owing to a high volume of everyday traffic, massive quantities of pollutants
such
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 as CO2 are constantly released into the atmosphere, causing the degradation of air quality.
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 is closely associated with various types of respiratory diseases or even lung cancer.
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,
people
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 in big
cities
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 are being bombarded with too much
information
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 from the media, including TV, social networking sites and advertisements
while
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the
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a
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 large proportion of
information
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 is fake news or exaggerated commercials.
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 can cause confusion or, in some cases, social anarchy. In my opinion, the Government should do what
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 can to encourage city dwellers to move to regional areas. First, it will reduce the number of vehicles in
cities
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, which will definitely improve the situation where air
pollution
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 caused by traffic disturbs the lives of city residents.
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, fewer
people
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 living in big
cities
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 will relieve the pressure on these
cities
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’ housing supply systems when many
people
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 are living reluctantly in small, suffocating spaces. I think
this
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 is
extremely
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an extremely
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 important point to consider because living spaces are linked to
people
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’s mental health and how they perform at work. In conclusion, severe air
pollution
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 and
information
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 bombardment are among the most serious problems facing city dwellers nowadays, and I feel that relevant authorities should encourage
people
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 to relocate to other areas to live.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, pollution, information with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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