Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment.

Climate
change
is one the most important
problem
of our century. After the industrial revolution, the Earth temperature has
began
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begun
to increase.
This
is the main cause of natural disasters.
Country
all around the world are trying to
strop
come to a halt, stop moving
stop
this
problem
. I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
, there is no
country
who should work more to prevent
this
problem
than others. All
country
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countries
are
responsable
worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable
responsible
in the same way. Each
country
should improve his commitment to fight climate
change
.
For example
, the two of the most polluted
country
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countries
are China and India. A large amount of people live there, and
also
the most polluting industry
are placed
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is placed
there. There aren't strict policies to prevent climate
change
, so
indutry
the people or companies engaged in a particular kind of commercial enterprise
industry
try
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tries
to take all
advatages
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
from
this
. But it means to work in the opposite way to protect the planet. Often business is
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
to be more important than our home. But it isn't only their fault. Each
country
has the same
problem
related to their size. So each
contry
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
county
century
must to do
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must do
something to improve his commitment to fight
this
problem
, because
this
means
fight
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fighting
for our child's future
.
Accept space
.
Whitout
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Without
a team work between all
country
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countries
, climate
change
will
ramain
stay the same; remain in a certain state
remain
the most important
problem
of
this
century. A
problem
that could affect our future, making it unclear.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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