In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Now-a-days, old aged people
are prefering
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prefer
are preferring
to stay away from family in orphanages provided to them and run either by the private sector or by the government.
This
might be due to loss of all family members in any natural calamities, by accidents, etc., or may be
cause
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the cause
of certain personal and family issues. In
United Kingdom
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the United Kingdom
, people often go to
such
homes by themselves, once after attaining
certain age
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a certain age
, love to live with their fellow beings. At that age, no one can work or earn as they become very weak, both physically and mentally, depending on the case may be. So, the self-
maintainence
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
of those people is a bit controversial, that's why
government
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the government
takes care of funding part. But, it should not be confined to a single source, indeed,
for
example donors
Accept comma addition
example, donors
, charitable organizations, volunteers can
also
share the
part
a course of conduct
path
, in giving a helping hand to the Nation. As
such
, the burden shall not be centralized, perhaps, would get distributed with advanced facilities like
medical
Suggestion
medicine
, food and entertainment to them, which relaxes their mind with sound health. In fact, care must be taken by the family, their children for supporting their parents at that incapable stage with lots of love and admiration.
Moreover
, showing the gratitude for the sacrifices to the elders, that they made in bringing up their kids, with utmost care, affection and dedication. It is one's foremost responsibility in letting the aged members survive for
long time
Suggestion
a long time
. If they cannot do
this
in monetary terms, they can purchase and present the required food, clothing and other
such
necessities, bearing all the costs. Many-a-times, the Non-government companies (NGOs), tend to put forth their hands, to
such
people seeking shelter, for free of cost. I opine, the best source of funding is only the blood relation and none others can equate the place.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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