It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought close together.

Nothing is permanent in
materialistic world. People used to live together and their families were affectionate enough to assimilate members of different personality and outlook. But, nowadays, people prefer nuclear families because of the desire of being independent and live without any restrictions. Advancement of technology and
busy schedule
busy schedules
are some other causes of
transition. Everyone, in today's world,
independence of thoughts and are generally egoistic. They only think of their own benefits and do not take family betterment into consideration and
eventually lead to disputes.
, working people hardly get any time to exchange
with their families due to busy schedule. As a matter of fact, due to the increased use of smart devices, people can now talk or see each other at any time.
As a result
, they do not realise that they are physically away from their close ones. To bring family members together again, there is a need to inculcate brotherhood among kids right from their birth. A child always learns from what he sees, so it is a moral duty of elders and parents to live in integration. The
step in
direction is to discourage the increasing trend of child care centres and old age homes,
for instance
. Government should
initiate family integration campaigns so that people can be motivated from within against
unfortunate reality. In conclusion, busy life of a person
sometime separate
sometime separates
him from
family but
Accept comma addition
family, but
it is necessary to live with our blood relatives to create positive impact on our future generations. To bring harmony, some distinguished efforts are required from individual, society and government too.
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