To get a good job today it is more important for children to study mathematics and foreign languages than art and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is commonly believed by many that to grab a decent
job
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, students should study international languages and mathematics rather than arts or
music
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. I completely disagree with them as I think that a person would easily grab a
job
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if he studies the subjects of his interest and not considering the subjects with higher
job
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scopes.
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with, in
this
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modern world, there are plenty of jobs in each
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field whether
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field, whether
it is an academic
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of any other
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of entertainment.
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, nowadays there are certified degree and diploma courses
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in
arts
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the arts
and
music
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as well. Gone are the days, when these fields were just a
field
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of past time or entertainment.
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, these days there are so many talent shows
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as Britain Got talent or Rising star, which gave
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students to make their name. Once a student enters
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international event, it is easy for him to grab a
job
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.
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Also I
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believe there are equal
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opportunities for art and
music
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students as compared to mathematics and foreign language learners
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as
music
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director,
music
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composer and background artist and so on.
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, there are some countries where mathematics and foreign languages are considered as decent subjects while art and
music
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are just assumed as a
hobbies
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hobby
and students are restricted to choose those subjects as their career.
so
to a very great extent or degree
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, there is a need of awareness to discourage
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thoughts and give rights to students to follow their passion. In short, a successful person is one who is satisfied
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with
his
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irrespective of the stream.
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a mathematician who earns
eighty thousand
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an eighty thousand
rupees a month would not be considered fortunate if his passion is
music
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and he does his
job
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as a duty not with by his heart. In conclusion, no course would decide carrier of a student, it is the interest of student which could offer him a decent
job
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. I disagree with them who believe that mathematics is a better course to grab a
job
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as compared to subjects
such
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art and
music
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