To get a good job today it is more important for children to study mathematics and foreign languages than art and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is commonly believed by many that to grab a decent
job
, students should study international languages and mathematics rather than arts or
music
. I completely disagree with them as I think that a person would easily grab a
job
if he studies the subjects of his interest and not considering the subjects with higher
job
scopes.
To begin
with, in
this
modern world, there are plenty of jobs in each
field whether
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field, whether
it is an academic
field
of any other
field
of entertainment.
Moreover
, nowadays there are certified degree and diploma courses
for
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in
arts
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the arts
and
music
as well. Gone are the days, when these fields were just a
field
of past time or entertainment.
Additionally
, these days there are so many talent shows
such
as Britain Got talent or Rising star, which gave
such
students to make their name. Once a student enters
such
international event, it is easy for him to grab a
job
.
Also I
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Also, I
believe there are equal
job
opportunities for art and
music
students as compared to mathematics and foreign language learners
such
as
music
director,
music
composer and background artist and so on.
Although
, there are some countries where mathematics and foreign languages are considered as decent subjects while art and
music
are just assumed as a
hobbies
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hobby
and students are restricted to choose those subjects as their career.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, there is a need of awareness to discourage
such
thoughts and give rights to students to follow their passion. In short, a successful person is one who is satisfied
by
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with
his
job
irrespective of the stream.
For example
a mathematician who earns
eighty thousand
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an eighty thousand
rupees a month would not be considered fortunate if his passion is
music
and he does his
job
as a duty not with by his heart. In conclusion, no course would decide carrier of a student, it is the interest of student which could offer him a decent
job
. I disagree with them who believe that mathematics is a better course to grab a
job
as compared to subjects
such
art and
music
.
Submitted by harmankaursethi on

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