The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

The bar chart illustrates information about the proportion of unemployed women in four different countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.
First
of all.The highest percentage of jobless
female
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females
was
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were
in England. In 2013, England became the
first
with almost 7% of unemployed women followed by, Scotland, which was slightly ahead Northern Ireland. Wales has the largest number of employed women in 2013, with 5.4 % of undefined women.
In
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From
2014, the percentage of
unemployment women
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unemployment, women
in Scotland
has risen
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have risen
steadily.
while
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While
the rate has decreased gradually in
both of Wales and
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both Wales and
England.
As
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At
the same as in 2013, the least proportions of undefined women were in Northern Ireland with nearly 4%. In conclusion
,
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,
according to the chart Northern Ireland had
the fewest
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the least
proportion of unemployed women in both years.Whilst the rate has dropped in 2014 in a three of the UK countries. The rate in Scotland has
growth
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grown
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