The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
The bar chart illustrates information about the proportion of unemployed
women
in four different countries of the UK in 2013 and 2014.
First of all.The highest percentage of jobless female
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followed by, Scotland, which was slightly ahead Northern
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of Northern
women
in 2013, with 5.4 % of undefined women
. In 2014, the percentage of unemployment
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women
in Scotland has risen steadily.while
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of
Wales and England. As the same as in 2013, the least proportions of undefined Change preposition
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women
were in Northern Ireland with nearly 4%.
In conclusion , according to
the chart Northern Ireland had the fewest proportion of unemployed women
in both years.Whilst the rate has dropped in 2014 in a
three of the UK countries. The rate in Scotland has Correct article usage
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