Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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Are we buying more stuff than we need? Recent research indicates that a large number of people who run into debt is because they have bought things that they cannot afford with its wages. The endless desire of buying unnecessary things is caused for many reasons and some solutions are

mentionated

make reference to

mentioned

below.

To begin

with, the trend nowadays is towards buying things on the internet even if people do not need or use them.

In addition

, thanks to technology and online stores hardly a week goes by without receiving a sales email of some important brand with incredible discounts that in physical stores are not given.

As a result

, people

clic

a short light metallic sound

click

clicks

on the advertisement and end up buying something that they did not need it. But, where does

this

desire of buying more material things comes from? Many experts say that we are

living

the act of departing

leaving

faster than ever before.Paradoxically is we

achive

to gain with effort

achieve

achieved

then

, we want more

consequently

, we buy more

hence

, we need to work more. It is never ending

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we are constantly having a vicious life. The more people

have the

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have, the

more they lost focus

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To begin

to tackle

this

situation, individuals need to start taking some meditation courses

order to be more aware of the situations lest take rush decisions when people see advertisements

also

, people should ask

this

question before buy something

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refers to the speaker or writer

really need

this

? In

this

way people can start to be more conscious about the money they spend.

For instance

, in countries like

India where

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India, where

meditation is taught in schools

since

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from

early childhood are the ones where people only purchase stuffs with a real purpose of use. To sum up, excess material

possesions

the act of having and controlling property

possessions

do not enrich our lives. No marketer is pulling out our credit card at a register or

clicling

a short light metallic sound

clicking

to ship.In

fact buying

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fact, buying

things we do not need

keep

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to keep

away people from being who they really are, meditation

is highly need

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has highly needed

it so as to open our

concious

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consciousness

conscious

and spent money on what they need.

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