Employer should give longer holidays to employee to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree?

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Perks usually a big motivator for people to perform better job at

work-place

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a workplace

workplace

the workplace

. Some people

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advocate

have advocated

are advocating

that organization should provide

longer holiday

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a longer holiday

to its worker in order to uplift their proficiency. I completely disagree with

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viewpoint as soft skills and adequate training are the absolute ingredients for becoming more proficient at work.

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with, companies must conduct

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seminars

a seminar

or workshop for their employees in order to make them learn or adopt better soft skills namely, prioritization.

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the worker

a worker

to identify which task to pick up

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in tight deadlines.

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, one must be aware that talking to clients on

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a professional

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, business must opt to brush up their employee’s skills by conducting

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training sessions

a training session

. Training sessions about

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the latest

tools and methodology are helpful in order to help workers to perform the work in an improvised manner.

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, a graphic designer who is well

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versed

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sessions

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make them updated and competitive in the

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industry, which

is useful for their professional growth later in life. To conclude, some opine that longer paid leaves should be a key to motivate employees to perform better

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job, however

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, I disregard

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view due to the reasons that companies

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to focus more on

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the development

of other skills like prioritization and training about latest tools etc.

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is more impactful.

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Employer should give longer holidays to employee to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree?

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