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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #music #cultures #ages
There is always
hot debate
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a hot debate
 of
music
 influencing different people of several ages and
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 cultures. I firmly believe that
music
 has
power
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the power
 to bring the people closer as well as distant. I will be discussing the potentials of
music
 in harmony and love in
next
 paragraphs. In
this
 globalized era, where the musics of one
country
is played
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are played
 in many parts of
world
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the world
. It is an effective way of bonding with people of various cultures and promote togetherness.
For
instance many
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instance, many
 political diplomats when visits to fellow
country
, the host
country
 always plays the
music
 of
home
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the home country
country
 of diplomats,
this
 shows the strong relations between countries as well as an understanding between them
in addition
 to that some types of foreign
music
also
 have therapeutic values. The
music
also have
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also has
 several effects on different levels of ages. When you listen an old
music
 was
playing
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played
 by young generation suddenly you deep dive in the world of your nostalgia and you instantly connect with those youngsters. For an
example my
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example, my
 grandfather and father are big fans of Kishore Kumar
,
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,
 in their leisure time they
jointly plays
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jointly play
 and dance
on
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to
 his
music
 and enjoys the moment. In my opinion, there are insurmountable advantages of
music
 in our lives
such
 as for entertainment, to create
bonding
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bonds
 with different people as well as their cultures.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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