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In order to solve traffic problems, Government should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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It has been said that Governments have the responsibility to revive the public transportation system by taxing on private car drivers.
However
,
this
 phenomenon has both benefits and
drabacks
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
drawback
.
This
 essay will address both of the views with explanation
To begin
 with, one of the advantages of imposing
tax
Suggestion
taxes
 to private car drivers is, it will not only help to accumulate Government revenue, but will
also
 discourage to purchase from private vehicles which will eventually reduce the traffic congestion from the roads, as cars hold
majority portion
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a majority portion
 of the roads and highways.
In addition
, Governments could use the money to rejuvenate the transportation system which will increase the uses of public transport by people.
Nevertheless
, imposing high taxes on cars has several drawbacks,
first
 and foremost, improving public transport system is a mega project, and the investment required to finish
this
 endeavour
also
 enormous, so
only
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the only tax
tax
 on cars would bring the questioned about the probability of the project.
Secondly
, even
thought
(postpositive) however
though
tax
 on cars will help to collect some earnings, the
tax
 rate
use
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
is
 to be
falt
a fabric made of compressed matted animal fibers
felt
fat
flat
 for everyone. That means, there is a high chance to create social discrimination among people as poor people have to pay more taxes from their earnings than the
rich which will
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rich, which will
 create another problem
.
Accept space
.
 To conclude, it is
Government's duty
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the Government's duty
 to improve and maintain the local transportation services by collecting revenue, but if it totally depends on high
tax
 earnings
form
a giver or sender
from
 cars,
then
this
 solution will bring some other problems.
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