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Topic 2: Some British families decide not to buy televisions because they influence the development of the creativity of children. What do you think?

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With the rapid development of science and
technology
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, televisions, as an invention
in
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of
 the 20th century
is becoming
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were becoming
are becoming
 very populous in people’s life. People can be informed of the latest news and enjoy the
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 programs on over the world. In my opinion, I totally believe that televisions are more beneficial for the growth of
creativity
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 because of the following reasons.
Firstly
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, televisions are the most effective tool to inform children of the latest news and scientific development over the world. Television
tells
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has told
 us the recently
development
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developed
,
such
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 as genetic
technology
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, artificial
technology
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 and so on, which can stimulate the growth of
creativity
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 and encourage them to carry out the relevant experiences, to make the new finding and breakthrough in their study.
Secondly
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, some programs like adventures and geography, which are widely recognized as a channel can help the children’s knowledge. If children based on the knowledge in
textbook
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the textbook
a textbook
textbooks
, it seems to not enough breakthrough ideas in the processing study. Program like adventure can cultivate the children’s
creativity
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 to tackle difficulty; Program like geography can teach
children knowledge about
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children with knowledge about
child's knowledge about
child's child's knowledge about
children's knowledge about
 different countries
on
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of
in
about
 the world and making the children’s curiosity about the nature. Program about science and
technology
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 can inspire children’s interest in science and
technology
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.
However
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, the improper programs on television sometime have negative contents which play negative role in the growth of children. These programs lead children to violence, criminal road. To sum up, I believe that televisions will not influence children’s
creativity
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. But meanwhile, the government and
whole society
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the whole society
 should do their utmost to prohibit the programs have negative contents on television and provide the children with a clean growing environment.
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