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In many countries senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn’t justified. Do you agree or disagree

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While some believe that rewarding those in managerial positions with higher pay packets is appropriate, not everyone agrees with
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 view. Personally, I am leaning towards the latter position due to negative impacts caused by
significant difference
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significant differences
the significant difference
a significant difference
 in salaries within a
company
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. For one, executive officers should know that
higher
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the higher
 than sufficient salaries are not necessary. Indeed, the higher the remuneration they receive, the more likely the
company
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 to suffer from devoid of financial capability.
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, they often gain powers that money can’t buy.
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, they often make important decisions over how
to make
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making
 their
company
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 thrive. They are
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 entitled to allocate
company
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’s budget and designate tasks to other workers. In lieu of these non-financial entitlements, they should refrain from earning more than reasonable amounts as salaries. Unreasonably high salaries granted to the executives can
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 afflict other employees. In fact, it is foreseeable that many employees would feel powerless or even disappointment when they find out about the huge salary gap between the executive officers’ and theirs.
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, some may leave the
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, and others may go on to strike and demand a pay increase.
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, those actions
hardly be
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hardly are
are hardly being
 productive nor worthy to do.
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, unfair salary systems like
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 would yield unhealthy working environment for both employers and employees. In conclusion, I oppose to provide those in managerial roles with obscene amounts of compensation because it can cost the
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company its
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company, its
 prosperity and discourage other employees to work hard.
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Thus it
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Thus, it
 is recommended for the
company
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 to decide on the salaries of executive officers and general workers by adopting a more motivating salary system.
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