Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women?

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Though some people would argue that women are working in high-level job positions in many renowned organisations, the reality is that the number of
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women employees is very
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compared to their male counterpart.
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, the issue appears that the
government
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should reserve a certain percentage of
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jobs for women and
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is supported by a group of people while being criticised by another group. In my opinion, the
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actually should reserve a percentage of
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jobs to maintain the equal opportunity, to maintain a balanced workspace and in the overall economy.
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of all, the high-level jobs occupied by the male diminish the balances of
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between the male and female in
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organisations. Since we are living in a century where we are
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more sincere
to establish the equal
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of men and female,
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is very reasonable that women should actually work in
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high-level positions.
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, the consumers, end users and service receivers of a company and organisation are both male and female and female decision-making employees
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of
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companies are equally important compared to the male.
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, the society would like to make a balance between the contribution of male and female and again the
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between them, without letting women work in
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a high-level job position
, it would not be possible. The women are needed to participate in every sphere of society
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in
a better world and without letting them use their ability we can’t actually expect that. Fourth, the women are improving in terms of education,
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, contribution in the current era than before and
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a scheme is taken by the
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would inspire them more to run ahead. In
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world countries, the fate of girl is determined when her parents decide if the girl should go to school or should learn to cook and get prepared for marriage. The privilege provided by the
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in
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the case
of jobs for women would encourage
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parents to equally treat their boys and girls. In conclusion, a certain reserved position for women in high-level jobs is actually a good idea to empower the women towards the overall betterment of the organisation and society.
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