Impact of the internet in creating informative society is dangerous for India's rich culture. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

We now live in a digital age where the entire
world
is connected, through a tool called the
internet
. It is the result of the technology
that is
developing at a cheetah's pace. It makes us feel like the
world
is a smaller place, where everyone knows each other. It can be
accessable
capable of being reached
accessible
on various devices, like computers, smart phones, smart watches and so on. The
internet
is now available
at
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in
almost all parts of the
world
, and it connects us through the means of numerous social-networking sites. There is an ocean of information available on some of these sites. If someone wanted to know or do research on a particular topic, all they have to do is to go on to search engines like google. There are
also
various social media platforms that we can access through the
internet
, and they help us connect to the rest of the
world
.
For example
, I, who is living in India, can communicate with a person that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
've never met before,
that is
living in Mexico. The
internet
provides us these platforms that have become a major part of our
lives
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life
. Now, coming to the topic of the
culture
present in India, we used to have one of the richest cultures among the entire
world
. For a geographical region, its importance lies in its
culture
and the traditions
follwed
to travel behind, go after, come after
followed
valued
by the people living there.
For instance
, Japan is still respected by almost everyone around the
world
, due to its
culture
and the respect given by their citizens to their elders. India was known for its people being friendly to the ones around them. Indians used to,
majority
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the majority
of the time, treat their elders nicely, with patience and gratitude. Our food and clothes that we wear is
also
a part of our
culture
. Most importantly, we used to celebrate our festivals grandly and be proud of our diversity. With the introduction of
internet
in our society, the phenomenon of globalisation has taken place here and it affected our
culture
in an extremely negative way. Due to people being able to have the opportunity to learn about
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
culture
, they have lost the interest in their own
culture
. People, nowadays, enjoy the continental food, like pasta tacos and cupcakes, more than their regional and staple food. They are starting to wear clothes which are too revealing and not a part of our
culture
. They aren'
t
celebrating their festivals,
for example
,
holi
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Holi
and
diwali
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Diwali
, in a traditional way,
instead
they are going out to party and have alcoholic drinks. The females
instead
of wanting to put on
mehendi
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Mehendi
and
bindis
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Bindis
, now want to get piercings and tattoos. Rather than listening to the music in their own language, they want to listen to the songs in
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
,
spanish
the Romance language spoken in most of Spain and the countries colonized by Spain
Spanish
,
japanese
of or relating to or characteristic of Japan or its people or their culture or language
Japanese
and so on. One of the main characteristics of us Indian people that we were known for, is being respectful to our elders, which we can'
t
see in many of the Indians nowadays, children are losing patience with their parents and most of them are joining their parents in retirement houses. To put it into simple words, Indians nowadays, don'
t
care about their
culture
anymore, and the major cause of
this
issue is the
internet
which has been made available in our country. To conclude, with the introduction of
internet
in India, has had a major negative impact on
our
things belonging to us
ours
,
then
used to be, rich
culture
. It made people too
obssesed
having or showing excessive or compulsive concern with something
obsessed
with it as there is a ginormous amount of information that we don'
t
know, and
thus
made us disrespectful and insensitive about others feelings. If
this
problem is not
tken
understood in a certain way; made sense of
taken
taking
care of,
then
at some point in future, we wouldn'
t
have our own unique
culture
and set of traditions.
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