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In many countries Women no longer feel the need to get married. Some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree ?

#countries #women #people #income #security #marriage
owing
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Owing
 to women have a great income and earning high position, in many countries, women think that getting married is not important. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
 concept because of the consequences that may arise from ending
marriage
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a marriage
the marriage
. One major result to not marry is a decrease in the population.
In other words
, the main reason to get married is to have children. When women decide to not have children, they affect
human race
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the human race
. It is true that in many countries the government limits the number of children per family, but they can still have a family. Having a family helps to flourish and develop society. I believe no one wants to live alone with no family. Except people who are not willing to get married because of various believes and thoughts.
Thus
, money is not everything in
life
. Another result to consider is women living alone for the rest of their lives.
In addition
,
this
 may result medical and emotional issues. They need a man to support them when they are in trouble. Everyday news demonstrates that the percentage of
suicide
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suicides
 due to loneliness
is
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are
 extremely high. People always need someone to stay with and spend their time. People
also
 have
better quality
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a better quality
 of
life
 when they can share emotion and feelings with their partners. In conclusion, the idea that jobs, strong positions, and high monthly salary are essential for fabulous
life
,
however
 marriage is necessary to have a secure and warm
life
. People will always need other people to grow and survive, and to have a most fulfilling
life
.
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