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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #people #newspapers #news #tv
Newspapers are the major
source
 of
information
 around us and
accross
to the opposite side
across
 the Globe. Nowadays, reading them are reduced to
an
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a
 large extend because of technology. Various online sites are available to provide
these
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this information handy
this information in handy
information
 in handy. Everyone has mobile with them and internet became
mandate
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mandated
in
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with
 it. Because of availability of web in personal cell phones, people tend to read news in it rather than
purchaging
the act of buying
purchasing
newspaper
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a newspaper
the newspaper
. For watching
tv
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TV
, to get
information
 or for any other shows, we need to be at home or at a particular place. Online made it easy for everyone in
such
 a way that they can watch their
favorate
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 shows at any time, where ever they
maybe
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may be
. To read a paper, we need to go to a shop to buy and read it. If it was half
completed
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completed, then
then
 we need to save it. It may contain
information
 which may be useful to us and may not be. So we need to go through each every page to check whether it has content that we are looking for. Whereas the alternative
source
, we can directly search for the
information
 we are looking for and can read it directly. We can have
an
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a
 glance of all headlines in
an
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a
 single page. If
required we
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required, we
 can dig into it. Same with the tv shows, we need to wait until particular time, for a show to get telecast. In
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
source
, we can watch it after the telecast too.
For example
, to view a particular show, we need to wait until that time
infornt
a person who supplies information
informant
 of tv and can view only once, but whereas in portable devices, we can view where ever we are, if we have access to www, and can watch multiple times. The alternative
source
doesn't required
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doesn't require
 huge investment and no need to cut down trees in order to make, one of the
information
channel
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channels
.
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