Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the near future, the science and technology
advanced
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will advance
in
such
a way that it suppose to affect human aging. It is argued that
this
is a positive development, while others disagree and think it will lead to adverse ramifications.
This
essay will discuss both views and shows agreement towards lateral view. To embark on, the increase in the people live enables them to enjoy
life
more. Due to
extension
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the extension
in the age helps to spend more time in
this
world and people could utilize it according to their choice.
For example
, there are many people who could not able to complete their dreams due to short
life
; now with
this
science
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scientific
advancement could
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
them in their extra
life
span. In short, people have more time to accomplish their dreams.
However
, some people believe that it is
negative development
Suggestion
a negative development
because now they have to more dependent on the medical equipments, which is not good, both in order to live their
life
fully and for their pockets
also
. With the medical
support it
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support, it
would be difficult to explore the
life
and it would not be as pleasant as they have earlier, and as it would cost some amount so it would be difficult for poor people to
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
the same.
For instance
, if you are rich, you would able to live more as you could pay for these new treatments. Clearly, it is not a positive idea. In conclusion, extended age given by new advancement in
medical area
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the medical area
is not as good as
original live
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original, live
and it could leverage by only rich segments of societies. Some still believe it would be good because
this
would give them
chance
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a chance
the chance
to complete unfulfilled desires. In my opinion, as it could benefit only limited people and you are more depended on medical things,
hence
it is not a good thing to develop.
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