The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart highlights the
exports
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export
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revenues of one country during 2015 among 5 categories
then
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it shows how the
value
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for each category changed in 2016.
Overall
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, both
of
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Petroleum
products
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and engineered goods achieved the biggest
value
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. Meanwhile, Agricultural
products
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and Textiles were the lowest in
value
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in
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during the whole period. In terms of Petroleum
products
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, it accounted for a slight increase from 2015 to 2016, at 3% so it rose
up
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from 60
billion
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to 63
billion
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in
approximate
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approximately
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.
Similarly
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,
Engineered
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the Engineered
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goods exports figure went up by 8.5% from around 50% to just over 60
billion
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.
In contrast
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, Germs and jewellery revenues had a slight decrease at 5.18%
whereas
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it dropped from nearly 42
billion
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to around 40
billion
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. For Agricultural
products
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, the values almost did not change as
it
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they
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fell
down
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only by 0.81%.
However
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, there was a significant increase in the Textiles category figure accounting for 15.24% where the
value
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climbed from around 25
billion
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to over 30
billion
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, products, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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