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The planet's population is reaching unsustainable levels, and people are facing shortage of resources like water, food and fuel. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation?

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Nowadays, growing population is
important issue
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an important issue
, which need to be addressed, Globally.
This
 may be because of religious customs in most of the countries.
Problem's
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The problem's
 and some of the solutions can be discussed in the later part. Coming to Problem's, because of
over growth
excessive size; usually caused by excessive secretion of growth hormone from the pituitary gland
overgrowth
 of human resources, we are majorly facing issues regarding food, pure water and fuel. Here are some of the
cause
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causes
. Cultivation became difficult due to global warming and deforestation. Increase in head count made to reduce forest area and burning of wood and natural resources
for
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from
 global warming, for livelihood of people.
This
 may have serious impact on daily consumption and may lead to starvation for many, which is for
few
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a few
the few
 now. Lack of green, have
impact
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impacted
 the
mansoon
(astrology) one of 12 equal areas into which the zodiac is divided
mansion
monsoon
, which in turn has
negative effect
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a negative effect
 on drinking water too, because of less rainfall. Consumption of natural resources for daily need
make
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makes
 them to edge of
exstinct
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extinction
extinct
. Not only the above mentioned issue, we are
also
 facing problems regarding health, sanity facilities. To resolve
this
 problem, we need to grow more trees wherever the space is available.
This
 increase rainfall and reduces the temperatures, that are increasing across the world. Apart from that, we need to encourage youth towards farming, due to which we can reduce the problem of bread and butter for our daily needs. Maintain of
eco
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Eco
 balance may
also
 solve the problem of water consumption. The Government should create awareness in
general public
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the general public
 regarding large families. In Conclusion,
righ
an abstract idea of that which is due to a person or governmental body by law or tradition or nature
right
 now it's important to go green as much as we can, so that we save
earth
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the earth
 and give
an
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a
 healthy and beautiful one to our
next
 generations.
Its
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It's
 not only the responsibility of
people representatives
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the peoples' representatives
peoples' representatives
peoples representatives
, but
also
on
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to
 everyone of us, to make to
acheivable
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achieve
achievable
.
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