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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an extremely important. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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This
 essay is about the
job
 satisfaction, todays in our society. Its main purpose is to elaborate the reason behind the unsatisfactory
job
 in our lives. In which we will discuss on different parameters relevant to
job
 satisfaction. The main idea behind our discussion is to find out the actual reason to overcome
this
 issue in our professional lives. There could be several reasons’ of not being satisfied with the
job
. Especially while you will be handling other parameters in
life
 a long hectic routine
life
.
Hence
, it’s extremely important in everyone’s
life
 to be satisfied in their professional
life
 because as I believe it has a direct impact on our personal
life
. It’s very realistic and common in most of our lives, when we are not satisfied with our jobs either in terms of salary, environment or strict office environment’ we could not live healthy and happy
life
 with our families. Because the unhappy
job
 makes us depressed and always tensed and we will be always thinking to move on to other jobs, to rid of the problem. In general, many people are losing hope and their determination to work. So
firstly
, to be satisfied with their
job
 environment I believe we should spend the required time in office as its expected from the employers, and apply our maximum efforts to complete our
job
 on time.
Secondly
, we should be ready for rapid changes to adopt, in the fastest growing industries to survive and compete the required skills. To conclude,
Although
, it’s primarily important for adults to manage their professional
life
 in a balanced way. As we already have discussed about the different factors which are quite important for
job
 satisfaction. In my opinion, the obvious factor is not being satisfied is, unscheduled work, delay and sometimes non-competencies in the workplace. Which are definitely fixable by giving attention on the employers, and providing them required
training
Suggestion
training?
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