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Is fast food to blaim for obesity in society or is gaining too much weight is the responsibility of the individuals? What are the factors contribute the obesity? Why do you think that children are becoming obese.

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 with, the majority of people are suffering from unwanted fat.
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 is due to the fact that many of them do less exercise and physical activities which are extremely important sources to remove obesity.
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, a mandatory lifestyle is
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 the biggest reason of overweight because people have to do a sitting job where they have to stick
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to
 the one seat.
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, people who are working in enforces companies have to stick to their places for the whole day.
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, the intake of more processed
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 is
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 the greatest issue of overweight.
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 is owing to the fact that individuals prefer to eat packed
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 which had low calories and too much oil. It is harmful to them as they obtain many health issues
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 as heart disease, asthma. Apart from
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, parents
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 play a significant role to gain weight in their
offsprings
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offspring's
 life They prefer to take them to restaurants rather than provide them
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 at home.
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, Students like to eat junk
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 in restaurants as they away from their home
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. To conclude, after
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consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 both the paragraphs I believe that people are responsible for their obesity while doing so many things in their life which creates various health issues.
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