some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women/ do you agree or disagree?

Human beings by their very nature like to compete to accomplish their goals. Yet opinions divided as to whether men are intrinsically more competitive than women.
However
,
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,
with the prevalence of
females
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female
females'
participation in
heart
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the heart
of society I entirely disagree with
this
notion that men are more competitive and I am of the opinion that
individuals
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individual
individual's
individuals'
abilities and
outer
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
factors are decisive to classify people as a
competitiveness
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competitor
competitive
.
This
essay will attempt to outline some key reasons for
this
. It is beyond dispute that males and females are naturally distinctive in term of physical capabilities,
however
,
this
has no relation to their innate competitiveness. Maintaining that it is in fact
,
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,
nowadays.
some
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Some
of the most influential leaders are women and many companies worldwide are currently having countless female in senior administrative roles. Clearly
,
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,
this
goes contrary to the idea that women are inferior to men and
also
conventional gender roles, which highlights the high levels of competitive character among women.
However
, perhaps the foremost among
causes
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the causes
of
this
notion that men are more competitive is that of social restriction for females. So worryingly is the fact that in the vast majority of countries the gender contradiction is so evident.
This
contradiction, possibly, can be seen as a major contributing factor to the widespread idea of less competitive nature of women. Prohibition of women to participate in social event
,
Accept space
,
vote and driving in the Saudi Arabia,
for instance
, could clarify why females would be seen as a less competitive.
This
can bold the importance role of external factors for being competitive rather than intrinsic features.
Further
and more obviously, though, women are mainly responsible for rearing children and take care of them. Having dedicated life to the children nature, women are less likely to seize opportunities to take part in
overwhelming number
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the overwhelming number
overwhelming numbers
an overwhelming number
of careers
such
as politicians or businesses. Despite
this
,
however
, it does not mean that women are less competitive than men. By way of conclusion, there are myriad of evidences which show how women are competitive and I reaffirm my position that despite the physical differences among gender, competitive character is depend on
outer
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
factors rather than intrinsic features.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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