Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is an individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

According to World Health Organisation (WHO), the prevalence of non-communicable diseases caused
by excessive of
Suggestion
by excessive
sugar
intake
, namely diabetes and obesity, has been increasing lately. Some people argue that councils have to take action while the
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
think that
sugar
intake
is a personal responsibility. In
this
essay, I shall give my opinion that both parties have their
responsibility
Suggestion
responsibilities
. On the one hand, there is always a government organisation similar to
Food
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the Food
and Drug Administration (FDA) in every country who is responsible for checking food ingredients, deciding whether it is safe for consumers, and giving permission for the distribution.
For example
, food containing more than 200 milligrams saccharin, a kind of synthetic
sugar
, has to be restricted because it is scientifically proven that consuming more than 200 milligrams saccharin per day in one year can lead to diabetes and obesity.
On the other hand
, people have to aware about their health by improving the knowledge regarding
source
Suggestion
the source
and kind of
sugar
that they consume and limit the
sugar
intake
.
For example
, alternative
sugar
Accept comma addition
sugar, such
such
as stevia and corn
sugar
are the best choice for people who like sweet cuisine.
Stevia sweetness level
Suggestion
The stevia sweetness level
is a hundred times higher than the usual
sugar
, but our body
absorb
Suggestion
absorbs
it less. So, we do not have to calculate our daily
sugar
consumption. To sum up, the government has the power to limit the amount of
sugar
in distributed food.
However
, limiting the daily
sugar
intake
and choosing the kind of
sugar
to be consumed are
individual’s responsibility
Suggestion
the individual’s responsibility
.
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