Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is an individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to World Health Organisation (WHO), the prevalence of non-communicable diseases caused

by excessive of

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by excessive

sugar

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intake

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, namely diabetes and obesity, has been increasing lately. Some people argue that councils have to take action while the

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others

think that

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intake

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is a personal responsibility. In

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essay, I shall give my opinion that both parties have their

responsibility

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responsibilities

. On the one hand, there is always a government organisation similar to

Food

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the Food

and Drug Administration (FDA) in every country who is responsible for checking food ingredients, deciding whether it is safe for consumers, and giving permission for the distribution.

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, food containing more than 200 milligrams saccharin, a kind of synthetic

sugar

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, has to be restricted because it is scientifically proven that consuming more than 200 milligrams saccharin per day in one year can lead to diabetes and obesity.

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, people have to aware about their health by improving the knowledge regarding

source

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the source

and kind of

sugar

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that they consume and limit the

sugar

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intake

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, alternative

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sugar

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sugar, such

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as stevia and corn

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are the best choice for people who like sweet cuisine.

Stevia sweetness level

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The stevia sweetness level

is a hundred times higher than the usual

sugar

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, but our body

absorb

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absorbs

it less. So, we do not have to calculate our daily

sugar

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consumption. To sum up, the government has the power to limit the amount of

sugar

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in distributed food.

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, limiting the daily

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intake

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and choosing the kind of

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to be consumed are

individual’s responsibility

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the individual’s responsibility

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is an individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

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Culture around the world has become more similar to the other countries then it was before. State reasons, example and conclude if it is a positive or negative trend?

Gender quality is always a controversial discussion point, especially in the job market with some occupations preferable to males rather than females.

A debate has arisen over whether the government should focus on supporting homeless people or implement other measures to address homelessness. To what extent do you agree or disagree?