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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops In town and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree

#growth #shops #town #cities
It is believed that the proliferation of Internet shopping will eventually lead to the closure of all shops in metropolitan areas. In my opinion,
product
 selection and availability are reasons why the growth of online shopping will drive stores into extinction.
Firstly
, online shopping makes
product
 selection easier for people.
This
 means that customers, do not need to drive miles to a shop to find their desired
product
. In the comfort of their homes and offices, people can determine the availability of the
product
 and select it.
For example
, eBay is an American website where Nigerians can buy gadgets and have it shipped. Another reason to consider is that Internet shopping helps people to save money. People that shop
online get
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online, get
 most items on sales,
Jumia
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game, for
game for
for
example always
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example, always
 run promotions on their website with discount on products ranging from 5%-80%.
Furthermore
, buying online exposes you to a wide range of products to buy from. In conclusion,
although
 there are demerits to shopping online,
it'seem
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it seems
it' seems
s numerous benefits
such
 as saving time, saving money and
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to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
s you
product
 selection overshadow any of its demerits
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