Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is observed that, deaths of teenagers arising from road traffic accidents
is
Suggestion
are
on the increase, to solve
this
menace, some people are of the opinion that folks other the age of 24 should not be allowed to drive a vehicle.
This
essay completely agrees with
this
point of view because the under 24's are not wholly matured to operate a car and
also
, they do not yet have a
sense
of responsibility.
First
and foremost, one of the reasons why I subscribe to
this
point of view is because,
majority
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the majority
of those under the age of 24 are not yet matured in all ramifications and allowing them to drive is like giving them a death sentence.
For example
, driving takes courage and maturity, if these kids are faced my an incoming vehicle that just had a failed braked, would they not
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
hope? Would they not chicken
out
Accept comma addition
out, thus
thus
loosing focus and allowing an accident to
occour
come to pass
occur
. Due to lack of courage and maturity, I think anyone In the early twenties should not be permitted to drive.
Secondly
, another reason is that, most young adults do not have a
sense
of responsibility, they just want to be gallivanting and cruising cars up and down, they are not so concerned nor accustomed with the rules and regulations of
owing
have ownership or possession of
owning
and driving a vehicle.
In other words
, they are only concerned with enjoying life, not with the rules and regulations guiding driving as a whole.
For instance
, an artiste of the same age, in Nigeria got himself killed, as he was drunk due to lack of
sense
of responsibility and ran into a truck that was standing by itself. To avoid loosing the young adults
unduely
to an undue degree
unduly
, it is better if they are denied the right of driving a motor. In conclusion,
although
it may look like denying the young adults their rights, but because of their immaturity and no
sense
of accountability, they should be stopped from driving.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • traffic fatalities
  • risk perception
  • graduated licensing
  • enforceable legislation
  • statistical correlation
  • demographic analysis
  • adolescent development
  • age discrimination
  • public transportation
  • driving prohibition
  • legal restrictions
  • vehicular accidents
  • rash driving
  • defensive driving
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