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Some people believe that governments must apply high taxes to provide good public services for everyone. Give our opinion.

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Imposing taxes is how
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 generate revenue they require to run the country.
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 the common
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 is that high
tax
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 rates are crucial for
betterment
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the betterment
 of public services, there are groups who would argue against
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.
This
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 essay will
demostrate
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
demonstrate
 why taxing at a higher
rate
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 is
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 to ensure better public services for all, and to ensure proper wealth distribution in the society. The economic development of a country is dependant on the development of infrastructure
such
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 as roads,
electrictiy
a physical phenomenon associated with stationary or moving electrons and protons
electricity
, bridges etc. The government pays for these through the amount generated from taxes. By charging more taxes, authorities can ensure greater developments of public services.
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 is evident from the developed countries where they
tax
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 you more, but in return you get more in the forms of public services. While in developing countries, as you do not have to pay hefty taxes, you won’t get to enjoy better public services. High
tax
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rates
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rates, thus
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 serve to the overall development of the country. Taxes
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 play an important role in creating a balanced society through
distribution
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the distribution
 of wealths. Taxes are usually not imposed
on
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at
 a flat
rate
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 rather
on
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at
 an increasing
rate
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 as opposed to your wealth. That means, the
wealtheir
having an abundant supply of money or possessions of value
wealthy
wealthier
other
 people pay more
tax
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 than those of less
fortunates
having unexpected good fortune
fortunate
. As
tax
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 is used for the betterment of all in the form of
publi`c
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
 services,
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 creates a better distribution of wealth within the society. To conclude, higher
tax
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 rates are co-related
with
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to
 better public services.
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, taxing at an abnormally high
rate
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 may
reult
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
result
 in people losing interest in earning more,
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 hurting the economy. In my opinion,
government
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the government
 should find perfect
tax
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 rates that appreciates economy, and
also
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 generates enough revenue for the public services.
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