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Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?

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 and fame are not exact keys to open the lock of happiness. Film stars and music celebrities earn a great deal in living a luxurious life along with so much popularity.
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, some of them are not even happy in their lives.
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 about the price someone can pay for being famous. Happiness is a key index which comes from what you really want to achieve along with what you have faced to reach there. Great
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 have struggled so much to reach heights know how to love even a bit of success.
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 like Abhishek Bacchan, who have got cooked up
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 of popularity from their family. Even they do good in their carrier, people demand for better.
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 leads the entry of sorrow in their personal lives as they have to maintain the fame and respect which they already got without
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. Being famous can be a gift or a result of
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 is an outcome of what you have struggled, chances of cheer in life are more.
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, it is really tough to understand happiness
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 you have not faced the sadness.
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 instance, a person has never faced hunger in his life. Can he enjoy the food with the taste a hungry person can
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