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Some people think the government funding should not be used for supporting art and culture, others think supporting cultural activities may be beneficial for the population and the culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Government
should spent
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should spend
 its
money
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 effectively for the welfare of the people. Some people believe that it is necessary to support art and
culture
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 through government funding. So that it will be
helpfull
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
 for people and
culture
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.
while
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While
 some people
thinks
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think
 that it is unnecessary.
Firstly
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, the government
should spent
Suggestion
should spend
 its
money
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 on basic needs which will improve the
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 of the people. Most part of the
money
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 should be invested in education and health care of the people.
For example
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, If the government
fail
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fails
 to invest in healthcare, there will be more
unhealty
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
 people in the society which can be a hindrance to the
developemt
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
 of
nation
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a nation
the nation
nations
 and people without proper education cannot contribute more to the development of science and technology.
Although
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healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 and education needs most of the funding, it is necessary to spend some amount on the art and
culture
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.
This
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 will encourage more people to involve in the creative field. People who are always into the
stressfull
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
 routine life can be relaxed by spending some time on the arts.
This
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 can be used as
an
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a
 recreational activity.Developing good quality arts may contribute to the revenue of the country and can help in reaching the country's
culture
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 worldwide. Despite the need to
spent
Suggestion
spend
 more
money
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 on basic needs of the people.In my opinion, spending some amount on arts and
culture
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 will be beneficial for the population and
culture
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.
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