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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays
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it is
it's
 become debatable on which is more important in
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work place
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the work place
, the appearance of the worker or the
work
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 value. Some groups say that the employees should invest in presenting themselves by smart dressing while others argue that job performance is of paramount importance.
This
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 essay will explain both of these notions.
To begin
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 with, people in working organizations propose to observe a proper decorum in terms of appearance and dress code in the
work
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 places. The reason is that being presentable and dressing properly can boost the employee’s confidence and moral. According to an international firm Ernst and Young, making dress code for their workers has a positive feedback. They come to the office wearing semi-formal attire which makes them feel very professional
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 they act more professional. Enhancing self-confidence proves that it affects the way people do their jobs.
On the other hand
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, people opposed
this
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 idea because they believe that the employers must put more attention in the performance of the employees in terms of
work
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. An institution or a company relies on the quality of jobs the workers give to maintain the standard.
For example
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, the Apple
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(
a multi-conglomerate company) let their workers
to come
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come
 to the
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 in any attire they want as long as it is decent. They focus more on the skills of their manpower to produce high end products with the best quality for the general costumers. Skills and hard
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plays
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play
 a vital role in better job performance. In my opinion, these two factors are beneficial not only to the company itself,
also
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 to the
employees but
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employees, but
 the quality of
work
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 outweighs the other. Dressing smartly is a good way to encourage the employees to be aware of their
appearance especially
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appearance, especially
 those working in the corporate world because they have to deal with people in formal business.
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, they must not forget to do their best in the jobs given to them. At the end of the day, it is the way a person performs his/her job that matters more regardless how formal or fashionable his/her clothes can be. To conclude, the employers should encourage their workers to be free in choosing what clothes they want to wear as long as it is proper and remind them to value the
work
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 they do utmost.
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