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The government should allocate more funds to teaching science rather than other subjects for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

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Studying
science
 has always been the valued and essential part of the society. It is argued that the state must provide
wealth
Suggestion
a wealth
to
Suggestion
of
 teaching
science
 more than other subjects for a nation to grow and improve. I completely agree, because without the help of
science
 subject humans cannot develop and other subjects
also
 require
science
.
Science
 and technology are vital for the progress of any nation without scientist or doctors’ people cannot find solutions to deadly diseases to save the humankind.
Hence
 the government should reserve extra money for teaching
science
 in schools as compare with other subjects. In the
last
 decade, the disease named AIDS had
tremendous life loss
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a tremendous life loss
tremendous life losses
 in the society with the spread of HIV infection,
therefore
 the scientist worked hard with quick results to find out the ways to protect people from
such
 infections with certain precautionary measures.
In addition
 to
this
,
science
 is the subject, which is linked
with
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to
 other subjects,
in other words
, other subjects are incomplete without
science
.
Thus
,
state
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the state
states
 must give top priority to
science
 in terms of budgeting.
For instance
, geographical study of earth
always need
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always needs
science
 to find the probable reason of
such
 conditions of a particular land, possibility of cultivation in desert land or making the land suitable for agricultural purposes.
Therefore
, it is necessary that
government
Suggestion
the government
 should distribute more wealth for
science
 as compare with other subjects, so that more and more students can study
science
. In conclusion, studying
science
 is
necessity
Suggestion
a necessity
 in
this
 world to upgrade and
develop
Suggestion
developments
 in various fields,
therefore
 I believe that, the government should a lot more money on
science
 subjects as compare with others.
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