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The government should allocate more funds to teaching science rather than other subjects for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

#government #funds #science #subjects #country #progress
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Studying
science
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 has always been the valued and essential part of the society. It is argued that the state must provide
wealth
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a wealth
to
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of
 teaching
science
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 more than other subjects for a nation to grow and improve. I completely agree, because without the help of
science
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 subject humans cannot develop and other subjects
also
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 require
science
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.
Science
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 and technology are vital for the progress of any nation without scientist or doctors’ people cannot find solutions to deadly diseases to save the humankind.
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 the government should reserve extra money for teaching
science
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 in schools as compare with other subjects. In the
last
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 decade, the disease named AIDS had
tremendous life loss
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a tremendous life loss
tremendous life losses
 in the society with the spread of HIV infection,
therefore
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 the scientist worked hard with quick results to find out the ways to protect people from
such
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 infections with certain precautionary measures.
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 to
this
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,
science
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 is the subject, which is linked
with
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to
 other subjects,
in other words
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, other subjects are incomplete without
science
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.
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,
state
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the state
states
 must give top priority to
science
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 in terms of budgeting.
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, geographical study of earth
always need
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always needs
science
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 to find the probable reason of
such
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 conditions of a particular land, possibility of cultivation in desert land or making the land suitable for agricultural purposes.
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, it is necessary that
government
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the government
 should distribute more wealth for
science
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 as compare with other subjects, so that more and more students can study
science
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. In conclusion, studying
science
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 is
necessity
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a necessity
 in
this
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 world to upgrade and
develop
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developments
 in various fields,
therefore
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 I believe that, the government should a lot more money on
science
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 subjects as compare with others.
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