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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart depicts the percentage of
expendiyure
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expenditure
 shares in food, housing , transportation, health care, and clothing.
This
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 statistic had been done in five different countries around the world in 2009. It is clear from the graph that housing had the major expenditure in all countries.
According to
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 what is shown, the United
states
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 spent most
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 money on housing and transportation, with 27
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percent
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 and 18
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percent
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,
repectively
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respectively
.
This
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 trend was
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obsorved
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observed
 in Canada, with 22
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 and 20
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percent
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, respectively.
However
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, shares of expenditures on housing and food
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 the first priority in United
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Kingdom
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 and Japan. Housing and food accounted for 24
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percent
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 and 20
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,
respictively
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respectively
 in
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the U.K
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while
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 22
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 and 23% in Japan, respectively. Transportation
expenditure
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expenditures
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 were medium in all countries in 2009 but the highest one was reported in Canada , with 20%.
To sum up
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, we could say that health care and clothing were the least
catogeries
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categories
 which people spent money on ,
espically
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especially
 in Canada and U.K but the same
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expenditure
expenditures
 for these
catogeries
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categories
 had been reported in Japan, with 4% for both.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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