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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar chart depicts the percentage of
expendiyure
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expenditure
 shares in food, housing , transportation, health care, and clothing.
This
 statistic had been done in five different countries around the world in 2009. It is clear from the graph that housing had the major expenditure in all countries.
According to
 what is shown, the United
states
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 spent most
the
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 money on housing and transportation, with 27
percent
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 and 18
percent
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,
repectively
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respectively
.
This
 trend was
also
obsorved
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observed
 in Canada, with 22
percent
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 and 20
percent
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, respectively.
However
, shares of expenditures on housing and food
was
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 the first priority in United
Kingdome
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Kingdom
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 and Japan. Housing and food accounted for 24
percent
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 and 20
percent
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per cent
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,
respictively
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respectively
 in
U.K
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the U.K
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while
 22
percent
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per cent
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 and 23% in Japan, respectively. Transportation
expenditure
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expenditures
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 were medium in all countries in 2009 but the highest one was reported in Canada , with 20%.
To sum up
, we could say that health care and clothing were the least
catogeries
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categories
 which people spent money on ,
espically
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especially
 in Canada and U.K but the same
expendiyure
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expenditure
expenditures
 for these
catogeries
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categories
 had been reported in Japan, with 4% for both.
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