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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

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When two or more people work together to do a set goal or target, they have to collaborate and negotiate on smaller steps taken by them as a
group
. Many people believe that working collaboratively in groups
help
Suggestion
helps
 them in building interpersonal and cognitive skills. In my opinion, collaborative tasks
covers
Suggestion
cover
 each others' deficiencies.
Although
group
 tasks are beneficial for enhancing abilities of
group
 members, it
also help
Suggestion
also helps
has also helped
 in social loafing which doesn't improve the skills of every
group
 member.
To begin
 with, individuality of a person is affected by working
in
Suggestion
on
group
 activities and
hence
 the intellectual skills are not fully developed.
For instance
, people have become less confident enough to take risks and they don't take initiatives themselves.
Furthermore
, the confidence of people when they have to perform separately is
also
 hindered by the
group
.
On the contrary
, abilities like negotiation and communication skills are enhanced by doing projects and assignments together.
For example
, a
group
 of university students, working on a final year project, discuss and show disagreements on the inclusion of features they want to add in their project. Indeed, by agreeing and disagreeing to various points, they
also
 develop cognitive skills. Like by sharing ideas and by explaining their perspectives to each other, they can
further
 improve thinking abilities.
Therefore
, I certainly disagree with the notion to some extent only. To conclude,
inspite
Suggestion
in spite
 of the fact that there are so many skills people develop in
group
 activities, I still believe it decreases the confidence of individual personalities in a
group
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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