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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Most of the day is spent in the
work
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 environment performing our various tasks.
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, It is said by some populace that maintaining a good relationship
in
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with
 the
work
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 is not necessary as our major aim should be on the getting
job
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the job
 done. I strongly disagree with
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 statement as I believe that connection should be made in the
work
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 place for future purposes as well as to promote
togertherness
affectionate closeness
togetherness
.
Firstly
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, I believe one should establish long standing friendships in the office as
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 can be useful in the future or in the case of unforeseen contingencies. As the saying goes, "No man is an island"
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 when in need, we can turn to friends made in the office.
For instance
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, it was reported in the paper that a dying man who could not afford his surgery, was saved and operated on by his
colleagues
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colleague's
 father who is a renowned surgeon.
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could only happened
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could only happen
 due to the fact that the co-workers maintained cordial affiliations.
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, having a good relationship in the
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 is paramount as
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help
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helps
 to foster one spirit and togetherness. Most companies see
this
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 as essential which is why they organise team bonding, picnics and end of year party.To exemplify, In the recent inter company
competition which
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competition, which
 was widely publicised, the winner- ABC enterprises won due to team spirits and solid relationship amongst the employees
.
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.
 All
this
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 and more is the benefit of having good affiliation with your colleagues.
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, Companies are increasingly taking advantage of
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 and they encourage their staff to
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 do. In conclusion, while some believe that an office should be just a place to carry out your primary assignment. I disagree with
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 view and
i
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I
 suggest that our heart should be
opened
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open
 to opportunities and relationships that can be formed in the
work
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 environment as
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 will go a long way in our future.
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