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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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With a paradigm shift in social belief and people's fascination about having an enviable career, they tend to become parents at a later stage than the past. There are some prominent reasons for
this
 and I personally believe that it has more negative consequences.
To begin
 with, the average year when people get
married has
Accept comma addition
married, has
 increased than that of our ancestors.
As a result
, childbirth is naturally delayed. According to a recent survey, many young people who start their career after their graduation are more focused on their jobs than having their own family.
Besides
,
a
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 many young people are undecided whether to marry or not. Eventually, when they get married, they are already in their mid-thirties and they take some time to settle and have some financial stability before having their
first
 child.
Furthermore
, the old belief that a girl should be prepared to manage a family and have children earlier has changed and more wives work in offices than ever. The decline of the joint family has
also
 contributed to
this
 trend as couples solely take the decision of having a baby, unlike the past. If we notice the detrimental impacts of
this
 trend has, we would surely try to reverse it. The most cynical outcome of
this
 trend is the number of couples struggling to become parents. It is scientifically proved that
infertility rate
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the infertility rate
 among couples is higher who try to become pregnant after mid-thirties. Some of the couples eventually break up their marriages due to
this
 and it brings unfathomable social problems.
Furthermore
, having a child in the early years of marriage
make
Suggestion
makes
 the couple more family-oriented and
this
eventually help
Suggestion
eventually helps
 them have a better future. To conclude, late marriage, nuclear family structure, and more focus on jobs are the main reasons people become parents at a later stage and
this
 has undeniably more adverse results that the positive sides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delaying parenthood
  • financial stability
  • career advancement
  • personal goals
  • higher education
  • fertility treatments
  • relationship stability
  • health care improvements
  • personal development
  • postponing children
  • achieve milestones
  • family planning
  • modern society
  • life expectancy
  • paternal and maternal age
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