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In countries all over the world, the volume of road traffic is increasing at a faster rate than new roads are built. What are the causes of this problem? What are some potential solutions?

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In today's modern world, countries are facing the issue of road
traffic
volume which
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volume, which
 is increasing at a higher level than the construction of new roads. The increase in
traffic
 on roads is mainly due to people having access to buying personal vehicles on affordable rates and packages as well as the city sprawl. The said issue can be solved by promoting
mode
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modes
a mode
 of
mass
 public
transportation
 and implementing taxes on purchasing vehicles. One of the main reasons for the above-mentioned problem is the affordable price of vehicles, nowadays.
For example
, due to the increasing competition among various
cars
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car
 manufacturing companies, vehicles are now being offered to be bought
on
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in
 numerous packages and easy
installments
a payment of part of a debt; usually paid at regular intervals
instalments
instalments'
 by the companies.
This
 led to the higher purchasing of vehicles by the common
man which
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man, which
 resulted in
higher volume
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a higher volume
 of
traffic
 on roads. Another cause is that since the population is growing rapidly, the cities have now been started to sprawl resulting in longer distance between home and workplace.
This
 has caused more usage of vehicles on
daily basis
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a daily basis
,
thus
, causing huge
traffic
 on roads.
This
 problem can be solved in many ways. One of the viable solutions is to develop/upgrade and promote the use of
mass
 public
transportation which
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transportation, which
 can be done by the government on
macro level
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a macro level
the macro level
.
For instance
, in Japan,
majority
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the majority
 of people use
Subway transport service
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the Subway transport service
Subway transport services
, which is a form of
mass
 public
transportation
, to commute daily, due to which there is no load of
traffic
 on the roads of
this
 country.
Furthermore
, applying taxes on the
purchasing
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purchase
 of vehicles can
also
 result in less affordability by the customers and may result in lesser volume of
traffic
 on the roads. In conclusion, nowadays,
although
traffic
 volumes are increasing at a higher rate than the development of roads in many countries all around the world, due to the factors of vehicle purchasing affordability and the city sprawl, it can be resolved by introducing or promoting
mass
 public
transportation
 and applying more taxes on buying vehicles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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