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Nowadays it is easy to apply for and get a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, anyone
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 cards increase the purchasing power of people and improve their living standards. Unfortunately, if the cards are not used with care, they will land the holder in serious debts. In my opinion,
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 cards have both advantages and disadvantages. People can benefit from their
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 in several ways. It gives them immediate access to
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. It helps in emergency situations or when they want to buy something expensive. One of my friends,
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. Some
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 companies
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 offer zero percent interest
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rate
 on home appliances. Using
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 option middle and lower income families can buy washing machines or refrigerators on easy monthly
installments
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 cards improve their lifestyle.
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 eliminate the need to carry cash in one’s wallet. On the flip side,
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 cards can push people into serious
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 traps. They have destroyed many lives and careers. Cards make people compulsive shoppers. They encourage people to buy all the products in the market even though they do not need them.
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 temptation to overspend has disastrous consequences.
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 cards are good if you can pay off the entire balance when it is due.
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 loans have much higher interest rates than other loans. If you only pay the minimum balance, you will end up paying a lot of interest. What’s more,
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 transactions carry increased risk of fraud. Someone who knows your
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 number and other credentials can easily buy stuff using your
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 without your knowledge or permission. To conclude,
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 cards are definitely a beneficial invention, but we need to use them wisely to reap their benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • financial security
  • unexpected expenses
  • rewards and incentives
  • cashback
  • airline miles
  • impulse buying
  • accumulating debt
  • high interest rates
  • minimum payments
  • credit score
  • borrowing capacity
  • reliance
  • saving habits
  • financial vulnerability
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