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In recent years, there has been a rise in the popularity of second hand clothing amongst younger generations. Why is this happening? Do you think it is a positive development or negative development?

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Clothing is everyone’s basic necessity. Fashionable and latest
trend
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trendy
 clothes are
primary choice
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the primary choice
 for
everybody specially
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everybody, especially
everybody especially
 the young generation. There are evidences which
shows
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show
 that there has been a sudden increase in
demand
 of used clothes in
last few years
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the last few years
 specifically in
youth
. The reasons behind that might be the increasing costs of clothing or the decreasing
power
 of spending in
youth
.
This
 essay
discuss
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discusses
 about the reasons and whether it’s a positive or negative
development
. Many factors which
contributes
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contribute
 towards the reasons for
increase
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the increase
 in
demand
 of
second
hand
 clothing. The cost of fashionable attire is increasing which makes it less affordable to young people.
Moreover
, now-a-days youngsters are struggling to get into the
employment
 of their choice and higher studies are becoming more costly. Which in turn, decreases their spending
power
. And sometimes due to under
employment
 many
youth
have
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has
 to compromise with emoluments. Ultimately, they have to narrow down their desires of being extravagant. In
this
 situation they prefer to switch on
second
hand
 clothing, which has its own impact on the
development
. On one side, decreased
demand
 of new clothes makes it tough for cloth manufacturing units. Apparel making companies have to bear
cost
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the cost
 of decreased
demand
 and price increases
.
Accept space
.
 But on
other
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the other hand
hand
, it’s showing that
youth
are becoming
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is becoming
 less extravagant due to
less
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fewer employment
employment
 opportunities or compromise with
current job’s pay package
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the current job’s pay package
.
This
 shows clearly a decrease in
economic
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the economic power
power
 of
coming generation
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the coming generation
coming generations
 and makes us more worried about
this
 negative
development
. In conclusion, as the
second
hand
 clothes are becoming more famous in
youth
 in
last few years which
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the last few years, which
the last few years which
 shows a decline is purchasing
power
 of
youth
.
Reasons
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The reasons
 might be under
employment
 or quality jobs are becoming more inaccessible to young people these days. In my view point
It
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It's
 intricate a negative
development
 and proper measures to be taken to improve the situation.
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