Most people believe that stricter punishment should be given for traffic offences.

Nowadays a
traffic
violation is increasing and becoming more and more dangerous.According to the majority of the population,
traffic crime
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traffic, crime
should be severely condemned.I partly agree with
this
view, considering some circumstances.
Firstly
, criminal law is classified into infractions,
misdemeanors
a crime less serious than a felony
misdemeanours
misdemeanours'
misdemeanour's
and felonies and in my opinion, every crime must be punished appropriately.
For example
, if a person committed
traffic offence
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a traffic offence
and
consequences
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the consequences
are minor, and the man who commits
traffic crime
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a traffic crime
traffic crimes
with the lethal outcome it is unacceptable to punish both of them equally severely.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
agree to enforce much stricter
punishments
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punishment
if only the criminal who violates the
traffic
rules is drunk or under drug influence.
Secondly
, I feel that there are many other measures to solve
this
issue.
For example
, the government should make a decision that driving exam requirements must be more complicated.
For example
, the theoretical part of the exam consists of only 10 questions, which is very little to check person’s knowledge of the area. In schools, children should have a special school subject that will enable them to study
traffic
signs, rules, be aware of all
traffic
accident consequences and know how to provide/show
first
aid. And
finally
, the government should improve the city roads and install more cameras and speedometers, which will decrease the violations.
Consequently
, I
personallythink
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personally think
that the government should implement
strict law
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strict laws
taking into consideration all the above mentioned circumstances.
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