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Some people think that all university students should study whatever course they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #university #students #study #course #subjects #future #science #technology
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The confusion about the
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at
 the tertiary institution still remains
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 puzzle yet to be unraveled. While some sets of people think that undergraduates should be allowed to
study
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 the
course
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 of their choice others think they should not. In my opinion,
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I
 believe that learners should be allowed to take the path of knowledge they want in school.
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 essay will discuss both views and give a reasoned conclusion. On
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 hand, the best part of university learning is the ability to select
one
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's
course
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 of
study
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 as
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 prevents the student from losing interest in school. When a 3rd level education student voluntarily selects a
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 of their choice not only will they be
focused but
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focused, but
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 do the
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 passionately. During a survey
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 the academic times of the Northwest University in 2017 it was reported that 20 students out of the 50 students offered admission for the history
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 dropped out because they were not interested in the
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 but had been forced to take the
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 of their parent's influence.
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, in order to prevent
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occurence it
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occurrence, it
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 is necessary to encourage learners to practise what they love.
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, studying useful courses in the university helps to develop
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's future career prospect. Doing lucrative courses will increase
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's chances of getting green collar jobs after graduation.
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, in my
opinion i
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opinion, I
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 believe allowing a learner
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 of their choice is highly important as
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 will prevent them from being inactive members of the school society. To sum up,
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studying
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studies
 lucrative courses will be beneficial to the student in
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the near
 future but
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's happiness
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. It is highly recommended that the government provides a job awareness program for the students prior admission in order for them to familiarize with the different job
opporrunites
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 attached to the various courses.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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