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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows the amount of
water
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 used with different goals in six parts of the world. From the image, it can be said that the majority of the countries spend
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water
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agricultural used and a minimum part of it is used for domestic purposes.
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, each country has its own priorities
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 the three variables measured; agricultural, domestic, and industrial
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industrial
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, North America takes the lead with
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48%
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 being the country that uses more liquid on
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 matter, and Central Asia is the
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 one with 5%
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 only.
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, when talking about agricultural
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 Africa is the part of the world from the places measured that spend
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water
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 on it with a percentage of 84, and Africa
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 one that uses the less with only
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32%. The difference is not huge when it comes to domestic
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 being South America the place that uses more
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 with 19% and Central and South East Asia both with a rate of only 7%.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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