These days, many jobs require people to travel and this is disrupting many families. What effects do traveling parents have on their children?

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With globalization and a common business culture encroaching among/on every corner of the world,

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travel is becoming increasingly prevalent.

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may be positive for international economies, the effect

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trend has on

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relationships is questionable. It is argued that

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spend excessive amounts of time away from home negatively influence the development of their

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have for both a stable household structure and regular interaction with a positive adult role model. For one, disruption

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/of a nuclear family’s household structure can have devastating effects on a child’s educational pursuits.

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, a recent American study revealed that

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were 30% less likely to enroll in/into university than

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homes. As

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example shows a clear link between parental absence and the lowering of a child’s academic

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, it is easy to see that

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are at risk of underperforming in their studies.

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, the drawbacks

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travel has/

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on parent-child relationships can be seen.

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, when their

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are deprived

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/from regular interaction with a positive adult role model. Without supervision, young people

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/greatly too often turn to television for stimulation. The effect

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/on the development of a child’s mental health can be seen among some Canadian families, where

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show clear signs of lethargy, indifference and late mental maturity.

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, the negative ramifications that result from/

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absent

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are obvious. After looking at the poor influence

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mothers and fathers have on their offspring,

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are best to minimize the amount of time they spend away from their homes.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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These days, many jobs require people to travel and this is disrupting many families. What effects do traveling parents have on their children?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people argue that governments should make laws regarding people’s nutrition and food choices to improve public health while others contend that this is the freedom of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In some countries around the world men and women are having children later in life.What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problem, as well as practical problems To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home for work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?