The graph below shows an average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows an average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart depicts information about the carbon dioxide
emissions
per human being in four countries
being
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those
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; United Kingdom,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal. The graph collects information
in
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a
50 year
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period from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, there has been a
decreased
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as well as
an
increased
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in
emissions
of carbon
according to
the information reported.
For instance
,
United
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Kingdom demonstrates a consistent drop and
Sweden
, with a small fluctuation, decreases its
emissions
too.
Whereas
Italy and Portugal,
they
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consistently
increase
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their pollution throughout the 50 years recorded. Even though each year represents a different amount of gas emitted, there are some countries that had a small variation from the beginning to the end results.
For example
, Portugal started off with the minimum amount of toxic gas disposal in 1967 of about 1 metric ton,
however
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it rocketed to over 5 in 2007. Even though it had a gradual
increased
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, it was from the start to the end the country with the lowest gas emission of all. The same happened to
United
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Kingdom, its
emissions
fell, but it was constantly the country with the highest
emissions
of all.
On the contrary
, the results slightly changed for
Sweden
and Italy.
For instance
, Italy, with a small fluctuation, climbed from being
the
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second
to
obtain
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the
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third
place in countries with the highest emanations of CO2. As in
Sweden
, it when from almost 9 metric tonnes to over 5 releases per person.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, sweden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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