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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing.

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What factors contributing to
job
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satisfaction
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 How realistic is the expectation of
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satisfaction
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 for all workers. As adults, we spend most of our time working.
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, not everyone is satisfied with their
job
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. Passion for the
job
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 and
amount
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the amount
 of money paid, are some of the factors that contribute to
job
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satisfaction
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,
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 not all adults get accomplished. There are
plethora
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a plethora
 of reasons why people may or may not find fulfilment in their
work
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.
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, having passion for the
work
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. Doing your dream
job
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 motivates you and brings out the best in you.
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,
such
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 a person becomes fulfilled, having accomplished his life's ambition.
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, my father, a retired pilot, still talks about flying with much enthusiasm.
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, an individual would not be satisfied if he hates what he does.
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, the amount of money paid as salary or wage. One gets fulfilled when paid handsomely for his labour.
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, he is able to meet his needs
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 as feeding, health care, shelter, and clothing. These build a sense of accomplishment and joy for the
job
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. Even though some people derive
satisfaction
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 from their
job
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, others do not. People
work
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 for different reasons. Some do not want to be idle, others want to satisfy the desire of their parents.
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, they do not get satisfied from
such
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work
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.
This
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 is common with children having authoritative parents.
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, a neighbour of mine committed suicide recently, having left a suicide note about being coerced into law school, even though he ever desired becoming a doctor. In conclusion,
Job
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satisfaction
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 is influenced by many factors. It is important for all workers to have a sense of accomplishment in their
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work because, we
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work, because we
 spend a good time there.
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,
this
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can not
can not
cannot
 be
realistic
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realistically
real
 as some do hate their
job
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