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Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and, experience and support your answer with examples and relevant evidence.

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Parents
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The parents
 of
this
 generation pay more attention to a mother than a father, not just during the birth, but at the time of bringing up the child as well. While there has to be equal authority for both to take
decission
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
decision
 related to their
next
 generation. I completely agree with distributing rights amongst both the parents.
Firstly
, raising an infant in the 20th century
is
Suggestion
was
 a
stubtle
difficult to detect or grasp by the mind or analyze
subtle
 art and there is no defined set of rules which is to be followed in order to raise a child appropriately.
Moreover
,
father
Suggestion
the father
a father
 being the head of the family has a strict appeal to discipline their baby.
On the other hand
, mother would have to show concern and be helpful to them.
This
 is not a hard fast rule, but what we observe in houses generally. The above mentioned criterion points out to allocating half priority to each of the parent.
Thus even
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Thus, even
 fathers have to allocate
ample amout
Suggestion
an ample amount
ample amount
 of time to their children. Companies would have to follow policies in order to
provision
Suggestion
provide
such
 situations. Bringing up a child as a matter of fact is tedious. So, children might
also
 have to obey their elders. To conclude, discipline is a quality to be learnt by observing and not by imposing. Children of
this
 generation
shoudl
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be compliant with their
parents be
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parents, be
 it, a mother or a father,
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