Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both these points of view and give your own opinion.

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It is a debatable issue nowadays whether to prohibit movies and online games because they contain malicious content which have
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
adverse effects
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children mental health and
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children and mental health
community. Some people support
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view while others discord.
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essay will discuss both views before reaching to a reasonable conclusion. To embark on, movies have a great influence on the lives of people particularly children. Most of the children tries to emulate their favourite characters and watching them doing action scenes adversely affects them, and in turn, shapes their mind to perform the same.
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, studies have shown that people involved in violent acts were only trying to act out the images that were constantly impressed on their minds.
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, watching violent video excessively makes children aggressive and diverts their concentration from studies and results in poor academic performance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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