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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In present time different modes of
transport
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 should be used
instead
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 of private
ownership
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.
Introducting
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Introducing
 international laws to regulate the
ownership
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 of cars is a method which should be applied.In my
opinion both
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opinion, both
 of these
suggestion
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suggestions
 should be helpful for controlling the outburst of privately owned vehicles. Different modes of
transport
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 include
public
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publicly
 owned
transport
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, which are generally bus
,
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,
trains
,
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,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
.Public
transport
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 modes are relatively cheaper option to
private
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privately
 owned
transport
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such
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 as cars.For long distance
travel cars
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travel, cars
 do take the same time as a bus
,
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,
but the driver keeps changing which in turns lets you to be relaxed.
Also
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 taking in perspective of
enivornment use
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the environment use
environment use
 of public
transport
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 is a safer option as private owned vehicles emit more
pollution
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 in terms of usage per
person
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.As
pollution
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 emitted by a public
transport
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 vehicle would be more
comparing
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comparable
compared
 to a
car
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, but
pollution
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 would be more for
car
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 in terms of per
person
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 it carries. Due to
such
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 outburst of cars many countries have adopted strict rules for production of cars to meet the emission standards. Due to
such
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reasons some
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reasons, some
 cars cannot be registered.These rules are adopted for both air as well as noise
pollution
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.Some cars which are produced by Nissan do not meet requirement for
U
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
you
.S emission standards
such
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 as 'Nissan R32 Skyline'.These regulation
helps
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help
 in keeping in low emission of
pollution
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.
Aslo
the capital and largest city of Norway; the country's main port; located at the head of a fjord on Norway's southern coast
Oslo
also
 international laws regarding
ownership
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 should be put in motion.Laws limiting
ownership
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 of
car
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 per
person
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 should be applied in a country
were
In or at or to what place
where
 the
ownership
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 of cars is too high. So population should be persuaded to use for public
transport
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 for their daily commute.
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Also if
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Also, if
 public
transport
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 isn't available for
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
,
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,
carpool is
also
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 an option to be considered.International laws for
car
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ownership
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 should be introduced to restrict
exccesive
not divided or shared with others
exclusive
ownership
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 of
car
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 per
person
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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