For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people’s attention to art?

People
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Peoples'
values have changed and
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have a tendency or disposition to do or be something; be inclined
tend
to consider science, technology and business most important than
arts
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the arts
.
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Even tough have been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. In my opinion is that one of the most of the causes of
this
belief is the big amount of different
electronics tools
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electronics, tools
we have
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the right to enter
access
occurs
in these days that keep us distract from the rest of the
world
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world, then
then
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
reason could be that some governments do not give the support necessary to schools
,
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,
music and dance academies
,
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,
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
theatre
or even students that want to study but do not have enough money to pay their education in
Arts
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the Arts
.
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people changed their preference on
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topics, mostly
for the domino effect in society
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first
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a category of things distinguished by some common characteristic or quality
kind
of education in arts in school or college or even in their town were not a community hall with enough funds to invest in
this
facility they will grow without
this
important matter with the consequence of multiply effect in the
next
generations.
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However, there
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are
still people who care about
arts
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the arts
and have a
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strong
stronger
belief of
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facility can influence for better other lives.Have been
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having been demonstrated or verified beyond doubt
demonstrated
that many people
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had gotten
over in matter of addictions or different types of abuse through
Arts
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the Arts
. I am of my opinion that
,
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,
on balance, that the governments should invest in Arts so that can be available in public
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an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
or
schools but
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schools, but
mostly the change begin with us
,
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with the ones who believe in the power of
arts
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the arts
in our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • evolve
  • technological advancements
  • overshadowing
  • financial pressures
  • practical careers
  • digital entertainment
  • accessible
  • integrated
  • curricula
  • fostering
  • emotional intelligence
  • public art projects
  • engage
  • interactive
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