Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford.What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem

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It is true that people sometimes purchasing unnecessary things and can't afford it which, stuck them into

debt

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. As we live in the era of technology, some appealing advertisement and the excessive use of credit card force them to do it.

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drawbacks

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the drawbacks

of owe

money

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and suggest some several steps to solve

these issue

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this issue

these issues

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majority

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the majority

a majority

of people have budgeted amount of

money

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but the advertisement of a particular

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thing

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entices

them to buy it immediately without concerning about their purchasing power.

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creates various negative impact upon them by growing their

debt

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and augmenting their stress. An advertisement on tv

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as, a new smartphone advert which induce people to buying it

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which is entirely unnecessary and as a consequence their

debt

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also

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getting

rich

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richer

.Another reason is that

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lacking of the awareness of

budget

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the budget

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create

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issue.

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, If people aware of their capability of consuming

money

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then

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they could mitigate

these problem

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this problem

these problems

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addition people

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addition, people

have to be sensible to purchase goods and use their

money

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to buy those things which can

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meet

their needs with an estimated cost.These could be

prevent

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prevented

from

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getting

people into

debt

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govt

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should put restrictions on

debt

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and limits the uses of

credit card

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a credit card

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overcome it. In conclusion, as there is

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an enormous problem

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getting

into owe, people shouldn't purchase unnecessary ingredients and always ponder about budget before buying, which could save themselves to face

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford.What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are a important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate about whether people have the right to attend college so the governor should cover the tuition waiving. Meanwhile, from in my point of view, I do not consider myself an advocate of this idea.

I didn't have any nightmare travel experiences, but my friend has had such an experience.

In many countries nowadays,consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative?