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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford.What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem

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It is true that people sometimes purchasing unnecessary things and can't afford it which, stuck them into
debt
. As we live in the era of technology, some appealing advertisement and the excessive use of credit card force them to do it.
This
 essay will discuss
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
 of owe
money
 and suggest some several steps to solve
these issue
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this issue
these issues
.
Although
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of people have budgeted amount of
money
,
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,
but the advertisement of a particular
things
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thing
entice
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entices
 them to buy it immediately without concerning about their purchasing power.
These
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This
 creates various negative impact upon them by growing their
debt
 and augmenting their stress. An advertisement on tv
such
 as, a new smartphone advert which induce people to buying it
,
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,
which is entirely unnecessary and as a consequence their
debt
also
 getting
rich
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richer
.Another reason is that
,
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,
lacking of the awareness of
budget
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the budget
also
 create
this
 issue.
However
, If people aware of their capability of consuming
money
,
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,
then
 they could mitigate
these problem
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this problem
these problems
.
In
addition people
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addition, people
 have to be sensible to purchase goods and use their
money
 to buy those things which can
meets
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meet
 their needs with an estimated cost.These could be
prevent
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prevented
 from
get
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getting
 people into
debt
.
Furthermore
,
govt
 should put restrictions on
debt
 and limits the uses of
credit card
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a credit card
credit cards
 could be effective
to o
in the direction of
to
too
 overcome it. In conclusion, as there is
enormous problem
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an enormous problem
 of
get
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getting
 into owe, people shouldn't purchase unnecessary ingredients and always ponder about budget before buying, which could save themselves to face
this
.
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