being a celebrity such as film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems

#celebrity #film #star #sports #personality

As per the life going,

evevebody

all people

everybody

wants to became a

celebbrity

a widely known person

celebrity

or famous.

there

Suggestion

There

are

Suggestion

some

opinioun

a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty

opinion

opinions

I have about the same. As all know there are two

side

Suggestion

sides

have the coin.

here

Suggestion

Here

Suggestion

are

also

the two

seperate

act as a barrier between; stand between

separate

views one is,

whenever

Suggestion

Whenever

a person became a celebrity

firstly

he/ she can get more money

abously

unmistakably ('plain' is often used informally for 'plainly')

obviously

, As well as more popular, everyone wants to became his / her

selfy

your consciousness of your own identity

self

frame. Regularly he

she

have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)

get

invited

for

Suggestion

the functions, on reality shows, he

she get

chance

Suggestion

the chance

a chance

became

Suggestion

become

a headline or the maximum followers on

secial

relating to human society and its members

social

media so, who do not

wants

Suggestion

want

that? But there is an negative points

also

Accept space

such

as he

she lost his

freedon

the condition of being free; the power to act or speak or think without externally imposed restraints

freedom

compair

examine and note the similarities or differences of

compare

to other people, he

she will not go without security.

they

Suggestion

They

can not

cannot

use even public transport

also

Coz

the fan followers came to disturb.

she

Suggestion

She

he lost his

piecefull

not disturbed by strife or turmoil or war

peaceful

life.

they

Suggestion

They

also

lost the costly family time

also

bacause

for the reason that; on account of

because

of their busy schedule. So, my thinking is that

Accept space

be a common man is good or better than the celebrity.

because

Suggestion

Because

everyone can make money, we have to decide that, where we are going to stop

Accept space

get

satisfy

Suggestion

satisfied

Submitted by deshpandeamruta25 on Fri Jul 19 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!

Do you want to check your IELTS essays?

Submit unlimited essays, letters and charts. Sign up right now and start improving your writing skills.

3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
32Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

187 words

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

Public scrutiny
Intrusive
Endorsements
Sponsorships
Financial security
High-profile collaborations
Social influence
Philanthropic efforts
Trust issues
Mental health challenges
Substance abuse
Pressures of celebrity
Expectations
Disconnect from reality
Normalcy

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In art lessons, painting and drawing are as vital to a kid's development as other subjects, so it need to become a necessary subject in high schools. From my perspective, I both agree and disagree with those ideas and will tell the reason why.
6.5
band
Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally older people. Some people think a younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that higher positions are prevalently held by aged members in many organizations these days. While some people believe younger people would demonstrate better leadership, it is in my opinion that senior managers possess more advantages over the young in leading a company.
4
band
In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?
There are many advantages and disadvantages to being away from family while you are studying in many sides we will discuss the reasons and the advantages and disadvantages
7.5
band
An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?
In this era, more and more people tend to pick up some cosmetic surgeries to have a good look. Some factors like improving technology and also human desire are the main cause of this phenomenon which has a positive development in the economy and people's confidence.
<4
band
some people think pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a country developing and becoming richer, and this is hard to be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
There is a common view that due to country's evolvement, pollution and environment extermination have been increasing. The writer agree with this notion because there are more growing in building infrastructure of particular country along with transportation in the modern society.

being a celebrity such as film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems

Fully explain your ideas

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally older people. Some people think a younger leader would be better. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries university students live at home with their family while they study, whereas in other countries students attend university in another city. Do you think the benefits of living away from home during university outweigh the disadvantages?

An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development?

some people think pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a country developing and becoming richer, and this is hard to be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree.